''drip, drop, drip, drop'' that's the sound of rain drops dripping of the bridge railing falling into the creek. The grass is dirty and muddy, there are tadpoles underneath us in the puddles. There are sticks and leaves in the dips causing a blockage and a muddle. Hopefully soon the grass will be fresh and green again for playing in!
By Meg and Azaelia
dear Meg and Azalia
ReplyDeleteI really liked the short story you both wrote about the flooded creek< i really liked the detailed words
i am really looking foward to reading more of your writing:PS im sorry if i spelt your name wrong Azalia.
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Dear Meg and Azaelia,
ReplyDeleteHi I would just like to say WOW that was amazing. I really like your explanation about the creek because it is very detailed and thought about. I also liked when you said " The grass is dirty and muddy, there are tadpoles underneath us in puddles'' because it was giving me a clear picture in my head. I would of liked to hear more about the creek ! I think you girls did great, I can't wait for another one of your next posts.
sincerely,
Monique
Dear Meg and Azaelia,
ReplyDeleteI really liked your discriptive writting, how did you think of that idea because it was amazing?
I hope you write more of these amazing stories.
From Rahyne and Lily
Hi Meg and Azaelia
ReplyDeleteWOW this is a really good peice of writing.
From Riley
Hi Meg and Azaelia
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your writing. I loved seeing the great descriptive words you used.
yours sincerely
Darcy T
I liked it it was really descriptive
ReplyDeleteIt sounds cool have you actually been in there?!!?
ReplyDeleteHi Meg and Azaelia
ReplyDeleteI really like your writing with the descriptive words you used. You sound like you really want to play in the creek.