17 year olds should not be able to
join the armed forces
I strongly
believe that 17 years of age is definitely not an appropriate age to join the Armed
Forces. My reasons for this is, that you won’t have a long life, you are not
mentally prepared and there are lots of ways to get killed.
My first
reason is that you will not have a long life. You aren’t as
experienced as older Armed Forces personnel so you can die easily. Did you know
that 92% of young Armed Forces personnel die in war and don’t have a long and
happy life?
Next, at 17
you are not mentally ready. Imagine watching all of your friend’s die, that
would be horrible! Don’t you think so? If you get back from war you won’t be
the same person that you were before the war. You will be mentally and even
physically altered.
My final
reason is that if you go to war, there are lots of horrible ways to get killed.
There are many gasses, grenades, mines, bombs, guns, bayonets, rats, frostbite
and lots more! Being killed by any one of those things would be devastating!
Don’t you agree?
In
conclusion, 17 years of age is not an appropriate age to join the Armed
Forces because you will not have a long life, you are not mentally ready and
there are lots of horrible ways you could be killed. Does anyone really believe
that 17 years is an appropriate age to join the Armed Forces?
Excellent writing Natasha, I also believe that no 17 year old should go to war, I really liked your opinions that you stated and some interesting facts about war, one thing to work towards is to make your writing make a bit more sense.
ReplyDeleteGreat work Natasha I cant wait to read more of your writing
yours sincerely,
Darcy T
Hi Natasha,
ReplyDeleteI have to say this. I agree! The story has a lot of reasons. And the way you made the words bold made it look like it was shouting. Keep up the fantastic work! :)
From Scott
Hi Natasha,
ReplyDeleteYou used amazing persuasive language,I also liked how you made the words bold to really state the side of the argument you have chosen.
From Leila
I agree, 17 year olds should not be able to join the army, and great work on making it bold, it gave me the feeling that you were shouting it to the whole world.
ReplyDeleteHi Natasha,
ReplyDeleteYou used very good persuasive text.
I liked the adjectives you used and you really hooked me in at the start of your story!
From Ciara
Dear Natasha
ReplyDeleteI relly like your work it is so good and interesting and I can't wat to hear more. You also used so many amazing words on your work. You did so much writing I can't believe it at all.
From Rahyne